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My editorial notes on Man Bites World were really simple and straightforward–ambiguous dialog! contradictory description! repetitive narration!–right up to the last one. The very last comment I had to deal with bowled me over.

It’s a line of dialog that makes sense in my head, but none of the meaning it’s meant to imply comes out on the page. It is, essentially, a declaration of war on the status quo in the Twenty Palaces setting, and that’s not something you clarify in a ten-minute revamp.

For four days I’ve been trying to make this work. I’m going for a nice walk now to think about it.

More on food and obesity

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I’ve never eaten at a Claim Jumpers restaurant, and thanks to this article I never will. That’s two days’ worth of calories they’re serving there. The baby back ribs are 8 times the calorie load of a KFC Double Down!

And that doesn’t include the sides.

As I mentioned in a previous post, posting calorie counts is a sensible thing to do, although the evidence that it has any effect is pretty iffy so far. Posting calorie counts like these ought to be law. The article makes it clear that doggie bags are expected, but do people know that they need to split the Whiskey-Apple Glazed Chicken into three separate meals (at least)?

Thing is, picking a restaurant or ordering from the menu is a tiny decision (except at fucking Claim Jumpers). By itself, no big deal. As a habit, it is a big deal.

But a lifetime is built out of all those tiny choices. Careers are built that way, and many people don’t look at these choices in a systematic way.

This ties in with the teaching article I posted about a while back: For a long time, people were convinced that very good teachers had this ineffable, unmeasurable thing called “talent”. They were “good teachers” and they seemed to spring from Zeus’s head fully formed. It’s only recently that researchers are making a strong push to truly analyze the behaviors of talented teachers to see what techniques they use. Once the behaviors are well understood, they can be taught to everyone.

Which ties into writing, too. I’ve posted before about how I think of writing “talent,” and I think it’s very much a teachable thing (at least to a certain degree).

All of these amount to making numerous tiny decisions: Which side to order? How to ask the students to pay attention? How to describe this characters? Each task comes with differing degrees of complexity, but there are smart choices to be made and unfortunate ones, and the unfortunate ones drag you down.

That’s why I spent a great deal of time studying other writers. I needed to get past my ideas what what worked/didn’t work and see through to the successful strategies.

With food, though, that’s extra hard. So many of the strategies I see are about changes people can’t make (such as moving to a walking-friendly neighborhood), can’t afford (join a gym, buy more veg), feel like punishment (did I mention the gym? And the veg?) and fly in the face of their own physical demands.

A lot of it seems to be anecdotal, too. Jared ate veggie sandwiches at Subway! Bill gave up all white food! I’d like to see a detailed, large-scale analysis of how people who succeeded in losing weight did it, without the moralizing.

Randomness for 4/21

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1) Fantasy art or currently erupting Icelandic volcano?

2) Camera technology detects buried corpses from a plane.

3) A Choose-Your-Own Adventure, Lego Animation Style: Ronald Has A Spider On His Head.

4) Despite the URL, this link is totally safe for work: a celebration of portraiture. I love these pictures more than I should. I especially love the top one in the “Cowboys” entry.

5) I can’t see this at work; somebody please watch it and tell me if it’s cool.

6) Third edition POKETHULHU rules now available as free download.

7) A Hobbit hole too small even for Bilbo. At first I was all “Call me when you make something you can live in,” but as I scrolled through all the pictures, I was more and more impressed.

Climate Change, Al Queda, Tater Tots

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School lunches declared “National Security Threat” by group of former military officials.

Instead of going after underfunded school lunch programs, they’d have more success legislating against food advertising aimed at kids.

You know those times?

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You know those times when you think: “I’ll just open up that game and see if I can’t finish off that really tough level” and the next thing you know you’ve retaken Guadalcanal?

Yeah. I shouldn’t be having those times.

Usually, I would post this in a review roundup…

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… but I want to talk about it a little. The blog linked below doesn’t list the reviewer’s name (at least not where I could find it) but the Google Alert that directed me there said it was written by one “David Marshall.” Check this out:

There’s a fantastic market for spin-offs, sequels when one story arc has finished, and prequels. And those prequels can go back as far as you want into childhood. Hey, you could even write some for the YA market. Get them hooked on your heroes young and they’ll follow in lockstep into the adult serial. It’s a trail of breadcrumbs to riches. That means never starting at a beginning because, by our definition (on our contract terms to be negotiated) there’s no such thing as a beginning, just a point of origin tetralogy.” So poor unpublished Harry Connolly looks at the dollar signs written into the contract for his first novel, acts on what the publisher says, changes the title and sells his second novel.

“Poor unpublished Harry Connolly” pretty much describes me when I was doing the last polish on Child of Fire. I would have made “Poor” my first name and “Unpublished” my middle if I could have afforded the courthouse fees. But I couldn’t. I was poor.

Of course, now that I’m published, I’m as rich as a Wall St. con man, and I’m famous on the internet. The review I linked to above is a pretty positive one, all things considered, so why comment on it? There are lots of reviews out there. What strikes me here are two distinct points the poster is making (roughly speaking):

1) That I published Child of Fire, which is not the beginning of Ray’s story, for a big wad of cash, with any existing prequels held back for even larger wads later on, and

2) That I structured Child of Fire as a thriller for commercial reasons but I could have written something more satisfying (which I read to mean “not a potboiler” and “more art/less formula”).

Formula!! ::clutches pearls and faints::

Let’s break it down! (Detailed blathering, including the bad-literary version of Child of Fire behind the cut) Continue reading

This is why legal documents are not equal to a marriage certificate

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Outrage.

Followup to Armbinder’s article

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Gretchen Reynolds writes about the latest research in exercise.

It’s interesting stuff, covering the differences between men and women and touching on the benefits of light vs. vigorous exercise. I can foresee the new weight loss trend just as the wave crests–Don’t go to the gym! Put your home computer on a countertop!–but it’s interesting how focussed the piece was on weight loss rather than health.

Yay Museum of Flight!

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The layout is kinda funky, and why did the WW1 and WW2 planes have to be in such a dark environment? (My wife thinks it’s to preserve the planes, but I’m doubtful.) I had to take those photos w/out the flash on my little camera, so I apologize if I blurred the picture by moving during a long exposure.

But aside from that, it’s really a fantastic place. Truly awesome and amazing.

Here’s the Gossamer Albatross II, the human-powered plane from a few years ago.

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Here’s a V1 rocket and cruise missile

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And here’s a chart showing several different aviation maneuvers. You’ll have to click through to see it at the “large” or “original” size if you want to read it.

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And there are 70+ pics in the set over on Flickr, including some shots of the mockup of a lab in the international space station, WW1 bi-planes, the lunar rover, a couple jet engines, and so on. We almost toured the inside of Air Force One (a mockup, I’m sure) but my son had had enough before we got to it. I don’t know squat about planes, but it sure was fun being there.

See the whole set here.

Randomness for 4/17

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1) Hire an evil clown to stalk your child! Does this scream “Media hoax!” to anyone else?

2) This only needs one word: iPie.

3) Short hair is the new long hair.

4) Deleted

5) Automated online blackmail.

6) The internet was made for this: Betty White in a Metal Bikini Wielding a Flaming Chainsaw While Riding a John Ritter Centaur

7) The trustworthiness of beards. via pnh’s Sidelights.